From the article: The Ghosts of Monk’s Reach
Do you have comments or advice for Sharon? What was particularly good about the story? Are there things that could be improved?
Reasons
- Hi Janalma glad you liked the tale, the gramatical errors were purposeful because it is told in a Devonshire diallect and I toned it down a little because sometimes I can't understand it, my late husband was Cornish and that is even stronger. for instance "it were obvious" if you get the chance listen to the comedian Jethro, "what happened was" is how he starts his tales and jokes. Old Tom's drunkeness was precipitated by the arrival of his new son, just two days old, but once a bully always a bully, in those days they had a child and stayed in bed for days! I'm so glad I didn't live in those days, I can't stay still for hours never mind days. I think they would have to nail me to the bed! Eclair123
- —eclair123
Ghosties
- I liked this story. The second paragraph has three uses of the word 'old,' which probably needs to be cut down to one. There are some other grammatical errors, and a confusing bit--the reason for Thomas' drunkenness. But the charm here lies in the telling, as if it were a tale told often by an old storyteller in his own dialect. I enjoyed reading it.
- —Guest janalma