From the article: Mr. Criggs
Do you have comments or advice for Ian? What was particularly good about the story? Are there things that could be improved?
Strong narrative
- The story started strong and was well written. The first several paragraphs were easy to read. However, I think the length constraint forced the end to be slightly choppy, abrupt and not as well developed as the beginning. Given a longer word length which would allow the end to be smoother, this could be a great story.
- —Guest Tara
Ha.
- I thought you said you "approached this from the view of a fledgling writer." Well, let me tell you, mister, this is NOT anything a fledgling writer could come up with. It's freaking amazing and I wish that I had your talent. Bravo!
- —Guest Dakota Rae